Roaming Shadow

*shakes head* What's the point of that question? But, if you're honestly curious, I'd say blue, because it is the color associated with water. ~Hunter Grey. It's a nuetral color, ...

Well, the first thing I have to say is that the chapter is nearly exclusively dialogue. While dialogue is important, you need to do more than have two people talk ...

Areoman, when does he talk to himself? He thinks to himself, and makes the occasional comment to the reader, but as far as I can remember he doesn't actually talk ...

I've never been that attached. Heck, I've rarely cried even from the works of published authers. The closest I can remember being to tears was getting a little misty eyed. ...

But they become so real, they'll end up leading the story for me. In one thing I wrote, I planned for no romance anywhere! but the characters fell in love ...

"Moments. There have been a few opponents who matched me and I truly had to fight, but most fall quickly, dead or out." ~Hunter "Not long usually. Combat in mechs ...

I thought I knew a long time ago, but I have only truly known for a short time. ~Hunter I'm not sure if I know yet. There's still too much ...

I can listen to the flute for some time, if played well. ~Hunter I can listen to the same music for a while. Then again, I don't listed to much ...

Well, it seems like you've got this pretty well thought out. So, I don't see any logic gaps as of yet, and with the logical thought being put into this ...

Well, this is a rough plot outlining you have here. Currently, I don't really see any "gaping holes" you're worried about, at least where the meat of the story is. ...

There wasn't much around, but there was some activity. He scanned the area once more, and was beginning to get restless. "Techie, you see anything up there?" There was no ...

(Note: more possible spoilers) Well, since you've already let out some spoilers (which people can skip over thanks to your warning), I think I'll comeent on them. For those of ...

They certainly aren't common. I've only seen one myself and that's Maximum Ride: The Angel Experiment by James Patterson. He switches viewpoints a lot, and I thought it worked out ...

No, not at all. We are not nearly as alone as most believe. ~Hunter Not likely, but I'll believe it when I see it. Sharon Hell no. And I know ...

A little note: I've combined chapters 2 and 3, and taken out the dream sequence at the end of what was chapter 3. If you liked that scene, let me ...